aranya
2楼
这小子有钱,有老婆,有房产,有工作,却自杀了,有嘛想不开的。。。。。混的比我强多了
proserpina
5楼
What was your relationship to him? Feel like you have overdone it but that is just me.
aranya
6楼
博士同班同学。。。。好几年的同学
其实没有那么亲近,他都结婚了,我天生多愁善感泪点低,有点啥事都写首诗
我自我感觉压了s的韵脚,好吧,我努力压了一部分的s
flowery
8楼
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我晕,韵脚必须是元音吧?反正我从来没读过辅音做韵脚的。
比如别人写的悼亡诗是这样的
Do not go gentle into that good night,
Old age should burn and rage at close of day;
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Though wise men at their end know dark is right,
Because their words had forked no lightning they
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Good men, the last wave by, crying how bright
Their frail deeds might have danced in a green bay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Wild men who caught and sang the sun in flight,
And learn, too late, they grieved it on its way,
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Grave men, near death, who see with blinding sight
Blind eyes could blaze like meteors and be gay,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
And you, my father, there on the sad height,
Curse, bless me now with your fierce tears, I pray.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Tigerwood
10楼
LZ说一下同学的死因吧。佛家讲究自戕之人7世不入轮回
基督教也是很反对自戕的。人要放得开才走得远。没有那么多过不去的坎
catfishchen
11楼
感觉不要发到人家facebook上去。如果事情刚发生,还能表达悼念。这事过去很久了,无缘无故发到人家facebook只会让他家人伤心。还是自己留着缅怀吧
seemoons
12楼
留着给自己看吧。觉得感情好的,写得自然情真意切些,正如楼主自己所说,和亡者也不是多么亲近,纯粹是自己的感触而已,不觉得诗有多动人,就自己留着好了。
Appleworm
21楼
还是留着自己看看比较好。。。。。悼念亡人只是为了安抚自己的内心,说不定人家父母不想看到这样的诗呢。。。